No more trains!

I REAAAALLLLY need to make a point of not writing about train rides anymore.
Honestly, whens the last time I wrote something that didn't involve a girl riding on a train of some sort?

For the record..the previous story wasn't meant to be a "story" as such as it was a glimpse inside the mind of someone who happens to be riding the train. It was an exercise on my part in attempting to create a person that isn't just a flat set of character traits but instead a person with thoughts, ideas, feelings and prejudices..But I wrote about her having all those things on a train and thus it bothers me.

The train trend started in highschool, and despite the fact that I no longer even ride the T except out of absolute necessity or sheer laziness it seemingly is still so ingrained in me that I'd go so far as to accidentally write a story based upon a train ride.

It's easy to do something like that when you think of it. There's rarely a train ride when I don't encounter some kind of awkward or amusing or scary character who could either be a story in themselves, or cause the kind of thoughts that allow someone elses character to show through, such as I tried to do in my previous entry. There are lots of things to describe and a lot of different ways you can go with it...but in that way it's also kind of a cop out.

I don't really like "Evelyn" of my prior post. I also don't like the people I put around her on the train because they're so flat. I mean how believable is it really that a college aged guy...even if he were drunk, would sit on a train by himself serenading a random girl with don't stop believin? (which happens to be an awesome song despite my earlier description of it by the way...remember, thats the way evelyn thinks, not me). I think it'd be more believable if he had an entourage and they were all kinda singing it..or if they were egging him on or making fun of him or something. Who knows? I'll have to go back over it...maybe I'll edit it from the post itself. Any criticism that anyone might have is more than welcome. Just toss a comment on there and tear it to shreds. I won't get any better if I don't have an idea of what I'm doing wrong. Imight cry my heart out and call you heartless and cruel and what not...but I'll thank you in the end too.

Today's lesson though...no more trains. I can't write anything with trains in it for at least 3 months, unless absolutely necessary.